This blog post will take my short story from blog post #5 and take a look at how it may have ended differently. It will show how my emotions would have been different, how the choices I made would be different and how the emotions of the people around me may have been different. We were assigned these two readings: Rewinding & Rewriting: The Alternate Universes in Our Heads (NPR Hidden Brain Episode), Two Views of the River (Mark Twain) and these two videos for this assignment: Kramer vs. Kramer: Action Scene (Shows/Deepens the Conflict), Kramer vs. Kramer: End-Resolution Scene We all think about our life and the choices that happen, the thoughts of why did I do this, and how would my life be different if this had happened instead. We all picture our own ‘perfect’ versions of life, but life is not perfect, in fact it is nowhere near perfect, we all deal with things we do not want to and we see how our mistakes affect the people around us. If I was to change the way that my Blog 5 post took place, I would have the story have a more happy ending.
I would have tried to convince my Granny to let Benji live a little longer to see if he got any better, or at least have him go naturally. The thought of him going through the pain, both mental and physical still hurts me. I could have also used more dialogue in my blog post to give the readers a sense of the conversations that took place, it was hard to remember what was actually said, I was more shaken up with the fact that he was going to die more than I was paying attention to what the people around me had said, and what was discussed. I could have displayed my story in a different way, I chose to open with a vague description because I felt that it was the best way to draw the readers in to my story and make them think of personal losses that they have dealt with instead of force my loss upon them.
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Sabatino
3/2/2020 10:14:45 am
Glad to see content here. During our conference, we can talk about this post and all of your writing in our course thus far. For now, I see potential here for the memoir to become a space for deeper development and inclusion of this counterfactual.
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Michael Aruffo
3/3/2020 11:17:34 am
I like how you divided up the informative part of your post from the "meat" of the post. Emotional events definitely take your attention away from small details like side conversations, so I can see how it was hard to recall them.
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Bill Lewis
3/3/2020 11:22:31 am
I'm sorry you went through the loss of a pet, it is always emotional. i know were you're coming from with second guessing the decision to say good bye.
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Kalu Okorie
3/3/2020 11:56:07 am
I can feel the emotions.
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